The line graph below shows radio and televison audiences throughout the day in 1992.

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第一步：确定时态
因为是1992年，所以是过去时和过去完成时
第二步：确定内容

TV的观众从凌晨1点到晚上9点有上升的趋势，从晚上9点开始快速下降
radio的观众从凌晨1点到早上8点一直在缓慢上升，从早上8点到晚上12点在缓慢下降

TV的观众收看的峰值是晚上10点左右，
radio的观众收看的峰值是早上8点左右。

在凌晨1点，TV的观众收视率是大于5%，radio的观众收视率是小于5%。使用TV的人数比使用radio的人数要多一点点。
在早上8点，使用TV的观众依然是5%左右，使用radio的观众是大于25%。此时使用radio的人数远远大于使用TV的人数。
在晚上10点，使用TV的观众是约等于50%，使用radio的观众收视率是约等于5%。此时使用TV的人数远远大于使用radio的人数。

第三步：开始写有结构化的小作文
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This line graph give us information about radio and television audiences during the day in 1992.

Television audiences had increased from 1 am to 9 pm, but the audiences rapidly decreased since 9 pm. Radio audiences had slowly increased from 1 am to 8 am, the audiences slowly decreased from 8 am to 12 pm.

Television audiences reached the peek in 10 pm, which was almost 45%. Radio audiences had the highest figure in 8 am, which was more than 25%.

In 1 am, television audiences was more than 5%, radio audiences was less than 5%. television audiences were more than radio audiences.
In 8 am, television audiences was still nearly 5%, but radio audiences was more than 25%. Meanwhile, radio audiences were more than television audiences.
In 10 pm, television audiences was nearly 50%, radio audiences was almost 5%. At the same time, television audiences were far more than radio audiences.
第四步：反复修改

修改后

This line graph gives us information about radio and television audiences during the day in 1992.

Television audiences increased from 1 am to 9 pm, but the audiences rapidly decreased after 9 pm. Radio audiences slowly increased from 1 am to 8 am, and then gradually decreased from 8 am to 12 pm.

Television audiences reached their peak at 10 pm, which was almost 45%. Radio audiences had the highest figure at 8 am, which was more than 25%.

At 1 am, television audiences were more than 5%, while radio audiences were less than 5%. Television audiences were greater than radio audiences.

At 8 am, television audiences were still nearly 5%, but radio audiences were more than 25%. Meanwhile, radio audiences exceeded television audiences.

At 10 pm, television audiences were nearly 50%, while radio audiences were almost 5%. Meanwhile, television audiences were far greater than radio audiences.修改了以下几处错误：

1. “give” 应改为 “gives”，因为 “line graph” 是单数形式。
2. “peek” 应改为 “peak”，表示峰值。
3. “figure in 8 am” 应改为 “figure at 8 am”，表示在早上8点的数据。
4. “televisions audiences” 应改为 “television audiences”，因为 “television” 是单数形式。
5. “televisions audiences was more than 5%” 应改为 “television audiences were more than 5%”，因为 “audiences” 是复数形式。
6. “televisions audiences were more than radio audiences” 应改为 “television audiences were greater than radio audiences”，更准确地表达了两者之间的关系。
7. “televisions audience was nearly 50%” 应改为 “television audiences were nearly 50%”.
8. “At the same time” 应改为 “Meanwhile”，更准确地表达了同时发生的情况。
9. “television audiences were far more than radio audiences” 应改为 “television audiences were far greater than radio audiences”，更准确地表达了两者之间的关系。

第二次修改

范文

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The line graph illustrate the percentage of people listening to the radio and watching TV who were over the age of 4 in a 24 hour period, in the UK from October to December 1992.
这条折线图展示了1992年10月至12月期间，英国4岁以上人口在24小时内收听广播和收看电视的比例。

Overall, the majority of people listened to the radio in the morning while most people watched TV in the evening. Over the 24 hour period, there were more people watching TV than there were listening to the radio.
总体而言，大多数人在早上收听广播，而大多数人在晚上收看电视。在24小时内，收看电视的人数超过了收听广播的人数。

In regard to the TV, at 1 am there were under 10% of people watching TV. This figure remained relatively stable until 11 am when there was a steady increase in people watching TV before peaking at significant drop in viewers to under 20% by midnight.
就电视而言，在凌晨1点，收看电视的人数不到10%。这个数字保持相对稳定，直到上午11点才有人收看电视，然后在午夜前迅速下降到不到20%的人数。

Similarly, the percentage of listeners to the radio also began low at under 5%. After continuing at under 5%, the figure then rose rapid to a considerably of almost 30% at about 8am. From that point, the proportion of audience fluctuated in a gradual downward trend to 5% at the end of the day.
类似地，收听广播的比例也从不到5%的较低水平开始。在继续保持不到5%后，这一数字迅速上升，到了早上8点左右达到了将近30%。从那时起，观众比例呈逐渐下降的趋势波动，最终在一天结束时降至5%。